Feedback on our idea

The first bit of feedback that we received from our peers was that the part where the victim is on her phone texting is a bit too obvious and very predictable for a thriller film. Therefore we decided to exclude that part and instead add a montage of different pictures which show the victim lying in a pool of blood. This would then focus on the victim being murdered rather than captured, which creates more tension and makes the audience more intrigued about what would happen next.

Furthermore, we also decided to focus on adding pictures of the murderers previous victims, so we could demonstrate the fact that he is a serial killer. Additionally, this would give the audience more of a background to our opening sequence which would make them more aware of what our sequence is about.

To conclude, after receiving this feedback we are working on making further adjustments to our opening sequence to create a more believable and gripping storyline that the audience can engage in. In order to do this we are going to use the victim as the way into the narrative, which will be about the police trying to catch the killer. This differs from our original idea as before the narrative was more about the father trying to find the girl before she is killed. We feel like this change to the narrative will make it more suitable for an opening sequence of a thriller film.